Song: please offer names

[pola_bear]

This has no plot, but inspiration has been attacking me recently, I have another son gto finish, but by the vote opf filkhaven (I asked people to pick a or b) i finished this first, it has no plot, unless there is one, in which case, thats because it rhymed and the tune sounds occansionally like good king whenleslass(i don't care about the spelling):

You see me but do you know me,
& when you see me, What do you see.

I met you a long time ago,
Do you remember?
We were stuck inside the house with snow,
That cold december.
But now that time is past,
& time will stop-
for us no more,
That fire's just embers.

You saw me, but did you know me,
And when you saw me, what did you see.

Now years and years have passed since then,
time, it moves so fast.
And here we are back there again,
D'you expect this to last.
So you must learn new life,
will not come here,
just 1 more time,
That's all in the past.

You see me, but did you know me,
and when you saw me, what did you see?

There was a time when i'd have said:
We can sort this out.
today that time is long since dead,
no matter how you shout.
So now you must accept,
the faults not mine,
but only yours,
No more i'm devout.

You saw me, but never knew me,
so when you saw me, what did you see?
Who did you see?

Comments

[pbristow.livejournal.com]

Cool! [THUMBS UP]

The rhyme scheme works well, too.

[pbristow.livejournal.com]

Oh, just spotted you're asking for titles. How about "See-saw"? (Echoing the keywords from the chorus, and also suggesting a relationship see-sawing back and forth over the years...?)

[katyhh.livejournal.com]

Oh wow, I really *REALLY* like this!
*impressed*

[filkerdave.livejournal.com]

I really want to hear this. I've looked at it several times, these are GREAT lyrics.

Possible titles:

"When You Looked At Me"
"Embers"

[pola-bear.livejournal.com]

thanks for the comments, will contemplate names :)